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  1. UnknownOctober 29, 2018 at 8:58 AM

    After reviewing my peers papers, It is clear that I should go back and make sure that there are no opinions or argumentative parts to my paper. In addition, I should make sure everything is throughly explained while being concise. In this, the research question and gap in knowledge should be clearly stated. Overall, I should re-read my own paper, to make sure all aspects of the assignment are included and clearly stated.

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  2. UnknownOctober 30, 2018 at 8:54 PM

    I think your rough draft is overall good paper. You are clearly listed problem, findings and implications of your research. The flow is well, and the charts are helping reader to understand the results.
    The language is clear and concise. However, I have some suggestions for your format. For the in-text citation, the correct format is (author name, year, page number). Like this one, (Freedman and Fraser, 201, 1966), you should change the order of year and page number.
    Then, seems like you used quotation mark for all resources, so I think you can try to use your own words to summarize the opinions from other researchers, not just quote.
    The organization for this paper is correct. They are connected with each other, but you can give some suggestions about your research at the end of the discussion.
    At last, center align "Discussion" .....
    Well-done for this paper!

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  3. Konnor LindseyNovember 2, 2018 at 2:59 PM

    1. I thought it flowed very well through the entire paper. Listed everything that was needed and proved it with solid evidence and findings.
    2. Clear and concise, with not pattern errors that I could see, and fulfills the length requirement. I’m pretty sure your dates and page number/paragraph should be flipped around in the in text citations for APA format.
    3.I thought everything was pretty solid throughout, except a few thing in the Data analysis section. I would center the Data analysis title like you did with the methods section, intro, and abstract because it kind of got confusing with the separation of sections. Do the same for discussion section. Also, I would add more of a paragraph to the data analysis section.
    4.The finding of the experiment look good, but is there any data that could have been put into the paper, after the references page?
    5. I would focus on fixing the section heading first to make it more clear which sections are which. Then, I would go back and fix the in text citations to make it APA format. Lastly, I would make the data analysis first paragraph more into a intro to the results section and put your research or data in after the references page if possible.

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