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This assignment is comparable to a basic research paper done in normal English courses but is more personal due to the author's connection to the subject matter. The purpose of the first assignment is to learn more about the style of writing required for the author's intended profession. The essay becomes personal to the author through the questions asked in the interview conducted with someone in the specific field being researched. We are required to write a five-page double-spaced paper explaining the different writing styles and writing skills necessary for the specific profession. The paper must include six written sources and at least three should be academic sources and three non-academic sources are also required. This paper is a good way for students to study and understand the writing responsibilities they will have and the writing skills they will need going into their future careers. Questions: What is the difference between academic and non-academic sources?...
Overall, I thought the paper was very well written. You clearly did the research and knew exactly what you were talking about. The paper flowed really well and the organization made sense. There were a few times were I felt like you repeated your ideas in the same sentence.
ReplyDeleteThere are some things i think you can improve on. For example, some of your explanations could be a little bit more in depth because i feel like you keep it really short. Also, i feel like you could have used your interview a little more. the interview is a great resource and you did utilize it, but i would have like to see it more. also the citations could have been better. if you just google them yo should be able to find how to cite websites and interview etc. some of your paragraphs had really good transitions, but the paper would flow a lot better if you transitioned between paragraphs.
Overall, I thought the paper was really well written and a lot of the flaws are really picky.
After reading this paper I would say that you did an above average job with your first draft. You clearly worked hard and did the research required to write this paper to the best of your ability.
DeleteOne way you could make your paper better would be to get to the point a little faster and shorten some run on sentences. Getting to the point will help during your paper and give the reader the best impression in the shortest amount of time. The second thing is to work on punctuation errors for example on page four I found a few. In the second paragraph and on page five second paragraph. However, those are only some of the punctuation errors. Lastly I would challenge you to maybe reword some of your quotes and not quote them. It isn't a problem, but I feel like you would benefit more as a writer if you found a way to reword a few of the quotes and keep the same ideas. At the end of the day I would want to say that I found your first draft to be above average and a good start at something great.